Re: Extension: WG Last Call: draft-ietf-ldapbis-authmeth-15.txt

Section 7 1st paragraph, 5th line
        s/the the/the/

Also this paragraph is a little ambiguous, it might be better as

   An LDAP client may use the unauthenticated authentication mechanism
   of the simple Bind choice to establish an anonymous authorization
   state by sending a Bind request with a name value (a distinguished
   name in LDAP string form [LDAPDN]) of non-zero length, ...

Otherwise it implies that a sequence of two names be provided.

2nd paragraph, 1st line
        s/not used in/not used/

The same ambiguity about name values appears in Section 8 paragraph 1.

Section 9.2 2nd paragraph "with the same sasl" [mechanism] "sasl" should 
be "SASL"

In general, capitalization of terms (like bind vs Bind) appears very 
inconsistent; it becomes a distraction when reading the document.

The 3rd paragraph
        LDAP servers use the serverSaslCreds field, an OCTET STRING,
        in a BindResponse message to transmit each challenge.
        ...
        LDAP clients use the credentials field, an OCTET STRING, in
        the SaslCredentials sequence ...

Same complaint as for section 7 & 8, would prefer:
        LDAP servers use the serverSaslCreds field (an OCTET STRING)
        in a BindResponse message ...

6th paragraph s/client t/client to/

Kurt D. Zeilenga wrote:
> The WGLC will now close on Tuesday, 27 September 2005.
> It is hoped that this extension will allow for additional
> review and comment.  If you haven't commented already,
> please take some time in the next few days to do so.
>
> Thanks, Kurt
>
> At 10:27 AM 9/19/2005, Kurt D. Zeilenga wrote:
> > Please note this WGLC closes this Thursday!  Please review
> > and comment (and if you have no comments, drop a note to
> > chairs so).
> >
> > -- Kurt
> >
> > At 01:10 PM 9/6/2005, Kurt D. Zeilenga wrote:
> > > This message initiates a LDAPBIS Working Group Last Call on the
> > > document:
> > >
> > >  Title:     LDAP: Authentication Methods and 
> > >             Connection Level Security Mechanisms
> > >  Editor:    R. Harrison
> > >  Filename:  draft-ietf-ldapbis-authmeth-15.txt

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